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Punch of Love (Part 1)

Posted on January 28, 2011 at 6:49 AM

I started to write this short story of mine last December 28, 2010, at the same time as I have written the article about New Year. However, this narration was nailed, and never followed up by me, since we started to get busy. I decided to post some part of it, since I think that it still a long way to go to complete this one. 




Now, how come a category of short story is posted with a long one? :D




I do still remember how I spent my life during my high school days, where I enjoy everything I do, not unless it’s an assignment or some academic-related activities. I always seek to find happiness and freedom to do the things I want to do. Despite of being lazy, immature boy growing up in secondary school, I still achieve high grades.

 

It was one of my second year time when the biggest dilemma in my high school life turn in front of me. And because of that happening, my father has done something to me worth to tell me that he loves me. That's was worth memorable. So, let me tell you everything. It's my confession.

 

Second grading has just started when a program is to be held in the college gymnasium, which is to give an appreciation to a certain college student for having that certain achievement (I just forgot what it was). Days are fast moving, and the day that I'm talking about was to be held. Everyone is invited in the said event, but the high schools students are required to attend. Now, the program has started but I wasn't there yet. Can you guess where I am? If you think about an internet cafe, well, you got it right. Otherwise, you're wrong – obviously. (^^,) I was still at the preferred internet cafe, just in front of the main gate. (Well, if my friends and/or classmates can't find me, they know the last option they will be searching for.) I was still busy playing online games with few of my classmates, who are also my colleagues of playing MU online, Gunbound and Fairyland. When our time ended, we ran out, and headed to the gym immediately. I'm not going there if it wasn't for the attendance.

 

We arrived there just in time. Yes, just in time that the program was about to end. That was about three to four in the afternoon, I bet. But then, the awardee just raised an open challenge, specifically a quiz, that the winner will receive Php500. That was pretty big at those times, but I don't aim for it. However, for the sake of the word 'try', I wrote my answer in a ¼ sheet of paper and submitted together with my classmates. Then we went out.

 

After few days, two of my classmates and I, were called in the principal’s offices and congratulated us for being chosen as the best answers during the said program. That was for the High School Category. We were, then, summoned to the School of Teacher Education to receive our prizes. I didn’t expect to win!

Without a doubt, I know how and where to spend my money. If you’re thinking with those games I said before, then yes. It’s not that bad, but what I did is bad. Confused? Yeah, me too. Just kidding.

The bad side is that I didn’t just spend my money in computer games but I didn’t go to school. That was thursday, when I didn’t go. Instead, I went to the internet café and played the whole day, and just went home at the time it is certain for student to go home.



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6 Comments

Reply jahzxhayne
10:11 AM on February 09, 2011 
ahh. mao dy. hahee

aw,np ui.. gana bya pd mgread2,
especially samtang d pa ing ana ka puliki jd..

eiheh!
Reply romski
12:11 AM on February 09, 2011 
first thing, IMHO = In My Honest Opinion...

awh, it's fine. well, as always, thank you chin! ahehe...

ikaw ra ang regular reader and commentator sa akong writeups. ahehe..

uhm, News Writing like? uhm, not really. It is just that diha ko una na expose, sports news writing. So adopt2 na lang dayon sa uban writing styles.
Reply jahzxhayne
12:36 PM on February 08, 2011 
joker kaau. abi nqg kareply nq ani sauna pa,pgtan aw nq, wapa man diay! wahaha. ng assume qg humana. ayp! wahaha atik atik kaau. :DD
Reply jahzxhayne
12:30 PM on February 08, 2011 
sorry late epz,nel. ahehe
aw! waha. dtso daun qg identify kunohay sa parts, it doesn't show nga excayted! hehe

well,we all have dark sides,human as we are--ikanga.

wow! news writing, is it wat u really like the most?

agree much! writing from the heart really pours out the best from the deepest emotions that we have..

nwei bai,unsay IMHO? ^^.
Reply romski
06:19 AM on January 30, 2011 
This is the second time that I will be writing a reply for the comment, since the last time, when I have written quite long reply, my browser have crashed, and I'm not able to save anything. So some things in here are not really what I want to say, same as before.


Yeah, you got it right. However, not with the whole high school life, but only with my second year time, specifically that certain happening. Kinda bad side of me, right?

As of the story, you really are a keen observer, and really know the parts/elements of a story. However, it's not yet the significant parts of the story, since it's not yet done. Still the first part. I just published the first 7 paragraphs of it, while I have done writing 8 paragraphs.

Well, again, thank you!

It is really a factor that has a deep impact in my life. It really helped -- blessing in disguise.

Please excuse me, I think I can answer those questions, but not now. I bet the next part of the story can satisfy those questions, except for the third one.


I'm still an apprentice in writing, specifically in poetry/story-writing, since my writing background is in news writing. But still, striving and trying to be a writer, in my own ways. ^^,

Maybe I can say, just write from your heart. On my side, I can only write articles and writeups when my emotions go wild. I mean, when I just like to write, or have nothing to do, or maybe if there's something I want to write about. Normally, all of us encounters hard time to create/write something unusual compared to what we do regularly. But IMHO, what can help us in writing is also it's contrast partner, which is to read. I bet my explanation doesn't stay on one idea.
Reply jahzxhayne
12:23 PM on January 29, 2011 
whew. this story depicts what happened during ur high school life,right? the last sentence painted my face with a bit of smile, when you stated u went home just the same it's certain for students to be home.

hehe^^.

--about the story, as I see it . ( please correct me if I have mistakenly identified the important parts). :D
the plot is well organized, from its intro, followed by the suspense part, where you were called to the principal's office not knowing what lies behind the call;
the climax where you decided to pick a choice not to go to your class (after you've got the prize);
and finally the slowly coming down of the story, where you gave a brief information about what you've done after playing in the internet café,
giving the reader a chance to formulate his conclusion further after you have come home.
an excellent technique,too--foreshadowing. giving the reader a hint about what you must have done, or the next course-of-action you'll take.

to sum it all up,

congrats!
masterpiece well done!

about ur experience:
even if u didn't choose what u must have really chosen, still, having experienced it contributed to what you have become now.
I guess it helped, didn't it?
Since the story is based on your own experience, i think it is proper to ask you questions like these:
1. Have you realized something after having been done it? If yes, can you state what are those?
2. If you would change any part of what had happened in the story, specifically, in your experience, what would it be and why?
3. Any piece of advice for those aspiring writers out there, like me?(ahehe)