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H.B. says...

 

Hello there, young Kabayan

 

I was reading your about page and when I got to the last sentence, I was glad you mentioned that your readers can send suggestions, recommendations, and even corrections. Well, if I am correct, you are writing a blog that's intended as a collection of quality articles which you call "obra-maestra".

 

First and foremost, to become a site that has credibility for containing quality written materials, you always have to police your articles against factual, grammatical, and syntax errors. Take a look at your first sentence sentence for example: A young 18 year old man of a republican country is the writer of THE this site. The word THE should be omitted because it becomes grammatically incorrect. Also, if you want to use "18 year old" instead of "18 yearS old," you should use hyphens. It should therefore become "18-year-old." But if you opt not to use hyphens, it should be "18 years old." Notice the added letter S.

 

Let's go to your second sentence: He is currently a tertiary student having the course of Bachelor of Science in Information Technology. You do not own (have) a course, you take it up. So it is best to say, He is currently a tertiary student taking up Bachelor of Science in Information Technology.

 

Third sentence: Reading books, magazines, novels ARE some of his academic hobbies, including the idea that he write different genre of articles -- which in some, he exposes what he feels through writing. You only have ONE subject there, my dear, and that is READING so it is proper to use "IS" instead of "ARE." You might have been confused with having a series of words like books, magazines, novels, so you thought they constitute plurality. But we are talking here of READING as your subjects. Pupuwede nating gamitin ang ARE kung ganito ang pagkakasulat mo ng sentence: Books, magazines, and novels are some of the materials he reads.

 

You have to watch out for these mistakes. They may seem simple but they are grave grammatical errors.

 

I would love to continue but I have no time for now. Perhaps some other time, I will try to dissect the other sentences in your About Me page. I hope you won't take this as lambasting your written piece. In fact, I would like to encourage you to keep on writing. Writers have to constantly undergo sharpening and endure criticism, even harsh ones, so they can improve. So I hope you take this as a constructive criticism.

 

I am sorry I have to put this in your guestbook. I was looking for an email where I could contact you privately but I can't find it anywhere here.

 

 

Sincerely,

 

H.B.

 

Hi!

Yes, any feedbacks are welcomed. Well, it's not really my intention of writing quality articles, but somehow, it's just like that. What's the essence of writing articles if it is non-sense and of no-quality, right?

As reading your feedback, I have noticed that some of my errors are due to typoerror (just mistyped of it). I can say that because I do still have the hardcopies in here (hand-written). [I always do mistakes. Each and everyone of us]. Like the first sentence, (you even typed 'sentence' for two times ;p), what I mean with that is, "...is the writer of the articles found in this site." But I am stand corrected concerning with my course, the 'have' thing. I really missed that. Same as with the 'ARE' thing. I give two thumbup for that. I really learned from that one.

Let me thank you for your feedback. Though I feel a little bit embarrassed, and down, don't worry because it is really part of it. I just feel that way everytime someone corrects me. But trust me, no hard feelings with it. I know you'll agree with me with that fact.

Let me thank you again, for posting critique for my blog/writeups. I learn things from you! Also, thank you for the encouragement.

BTW, here's my email. prince_jroms@yahoo.com. Hoping to be one of your friends!